English 101: What’s wrong with this sentence?

Posted By on July 13, 2008

WFB Sentence

I enjoy reading books and certain authors for different reasons —
for example, I not only enjoy William F. Buckley’s sailing memoirs because of the sailing content but because use of the English language is impressive. That said — oh, and I’m not an English major (obviously) — this particular sentence from a book I was reading this weekend stood out: it seems to me that this sentence runs on??? (click for larger)

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Desultory - des-uhl-tawr-ee, -tohr-ee

  1. lacking in consistency, constancy, or visible order, disconnected; fitful: desultory conversation.
  2. digressing from or unconnected with the main subject; random: a desultory remark.
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